Chloe’s Narrative
It was the day the moon fell to earth...when it fell it went down with a big bang! Everyone got there kids and ran to the nearest place underneath the earth, we call those things shelters, in their families from all around the world came to settle in. When the moon fell to earth everyone screamed and yelled, some people even thought that they may die...that day, it was a desire for nonly New Zealand, but the whole entire world!
Civilization changed in the world as the days became longer and brighter as the moon was no longer darkening our cities and countries. We only got a little bit of a sleep as the sun was so bright, we wake up to bright morning days rather than dark mornings and nights. We all came to a good decision we were going to move to mars so we moved into the spaceship to go to mars so they all came to mars and they lived there and built heaps of buildings, they lived happily ever after.
Hi Chloe, I am Jaimie from st Bernadette's school.
ReplyDeleteI enjoy writing as well. And I really enjoyed your writing even though it was your draft.I also liked the way that they moved to Mars. Maybe next time you could end with something other than happily ever after, And how or what supplies the needed to make the rocket. Other than that great work looking forward to your next writing post.
hi jamie its chloe thank you for the comment I love writing do you. I am a year 4 and I go to yaldhurst model school sorry that I have not reply for ages if you have a blog I will check it out I love stbernadettes school because my big sister was going to go there.
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